Continued from After the War: Elise
As I huddled beside mother’s hospital bed with the laptop’s cursor blinking expectantly, mother’s voice grew momentarily animated as she described the day she learned to ride Elise’s beautiful bicycle.
I was dying to ride that bike. Finally, one beautiful sunny afternoon Elise took me out with the bike and coached me. She was patient and calm with me and soon I got the hang of it. I was on top of the world, sailing up and down the street with Elise clapping and cheering. We were having so much fun that we completely lost track of time. When Elise noticed the late afternoon shadows, she was mortified because she hadn’t yet done the marketing for supper. How on earth could she explain to her husband that she’d been so busy playing with a child that she had neglected to prepare his meal?”

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To fully appreciate Elise’s dilemma, consider what it took to run a household and provide three meals a day in the early 1920’s. An upper class housewife like Elise might have an ice cellar to keep a few perishables cool. But even so, with food scarce, marketing was a near-daily chore. Women queued up at the Marktplatz with ever larger fists full of cash and high hopes of purchasing fresh eggs, milk and meat, if any were to be had. Some women with access to a bit of dirt tended vegetable gardens; others relied on vegetable stalls. Limited amounts of these items could be found, and each, only at the appropriate merchant’s shop or stall in the Marktplatz. Farmers’ market days were held once or twice a week. Business hours were strictly limited. Transportation was by foot, bicycle, or street car. Bread was made at home. Elise may well have made a loaf that morning and left it to rise on the banked oven while she frolicked with Yry. Even the stoves were time-consuming and cantankerous, and required careful stoking with wood or coal to achieve the proper temperature. Those of us raised with Birdseye, toaster ovens, microwaves, and McDonald’s, would starve in the face of this never-ending circle of meal preparation. With no dinner waiting on the stove, Elise had legitimate concerns.
Normally Elise accompanied Yry on the trolley all the way back to Ritterstrasse. But that day Elise was so distressed by the late hour that she gratefully accepted Yry’s assurances that she could ride the trolley home by herself.
After all, I was feeling confident and grown up after mastering that big bike. I knew the way home by heart. What on earth could go wrong? But time declared war on me that day. As I arrived at the station, the trolley was just pulling out. The next trolley wouldn’t arrive for another 20 minute. It was growing dark and I could hear my father’s predictable tongue-lashing in my head. Well, for Pete’s sake, I knew the way home! I had two good legs! I would walk!
So off she went, with a bounce in her step, born of her success on the bike and Elise’s abundant encouragement and confidence in her. What followed were the vivid details of an incident that I’d heard alluded to in the past, but had blown off as the rantings of an overly sensitive feminist.
Linda, nice tease. I can’t wait for the next edition. I love they lost track of time. Keith
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Thanks Keith. You’re such a loyal reader.
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You’ve managed to get across the atmosphere of post-WW1 pretty well here, and I like the contrasts you’re making. The bike is a lovely image you could play with some more. But I don’t think you should avoid the political turmoil that was going on at the time. The fights between communists and Nazis were an important background to events in Germany during the 1920s.
And if I may be so bold as to point out that opening sentences paragraphs to chapters are also important, so they need particular attention.
You begin your latest post with:
“As I huddled beside mother’s hospital bed with the laptop’s cursor blinking expectantly, mother’s voice grew momentarily animated as she described the day she learned to ride Elise’s beautiful bicycle.”
Note how you use ‘as’ twice. It’s a small thing but you have to start checking these small things as you go along. There other ways of achieving the same result. For instance: you could have begun with; “Huddling beside…”
But I don’t want to interfere too much with your work as you’re doing so well, and I know this is a first draft. Great work, Linda!
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No,no,no, Bryan! You are not interfering. This is precisely the type of commentary I’m looking for. I really appreciate your close reading and insightful suggestions. Thank you very much. Please don’t hold back.
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You paint vivid word pictures …
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Wonderful writing. We take so much for granted today… don’t we!
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Yes, we do Denise. Thanks for dropping by.
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Love this one! Such an interesting post and you give us an idea of what life was like back then. Can’t wait to hear what happened when she got home!
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Thanks, Lyn.
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love this on going series!
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Lovely story, Linda! We are indeed so fortunate to live in this modern world with conveniences that make meal prep so much easier. I can’t imagine how difficult it must have been for my grandmother who had 11 children and tried to grow enough on the farm to feed all those hungry mouths.
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I can’t even imagine keeping track of 11 kids! I bet she put the oldest ones to work taking care of the littler ones.
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nice story, which i loaded and read offline llast week at the property. being offline is inconvenient, yet it also allows me to totally focus on ‘offline reading.’
thanks for a lovely story.. i look forward to more!
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Thanks, Lisa. I really appreciate how many hoops you must jump through in order to read and comment. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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you’ve caught me as firmly as in the spokes of the bicycle wheel – a cliff hanger ending to a charming and easy flowing narrative
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Thanks for your kind words, Laura.Your commentary is more lyrical than my narrative!
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We were talking the other day of our grandmothers and the amount of work they did to feed and clothe their family. My paternal grandmother also had a daughter with cerebral palsy which added another dynamic to busy days.
You have us on the edge of our bicycle seats…
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And back in your grandmother’s day, there were probably no resources to help her with her special needs child.
Thanks for the prod. I need to refine the next segment and get it up here. 😉
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Reblogged this on lynz real cooking and commented:
A wonderful story and amazing writer! This is the story of her mother and a continuing series!
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Instant connection with the characters, instant anxiety over her plight, instant admiration for her pluck. I’d say that’s a job well done in writing.
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Welcome to my blog, Eli, and thank you very much for your encouraging words. Hope you’ve got a great weekend lined out!
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A lovely story. It also throws light on what life used to be almost 100 years back… 🙂
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Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to read! Yeah, things were different.
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Welcome. Thanks to the wonderful soul, Lynn, for sending me here… 🙂
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She is an amazing woman! I hope to see her publish something about her experiences in Saudi. And, perhaps following that, maybe a cookbook!
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You’ve spoken my mind!
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